Ok! Today's dVerse prompt is "underground." It reminded me of a poem I wrote about a dream I had a long time ago. It was one of those vivid ones; reading the poem gives me flashes of images of the dream itself. The human brain is amazing, isn't it?
May 14, 2009: A Dream Humanity fled last night to hives underground to escape possible disease; Americans shoved into shelves with impossibly small cracks to be shoved into by, sealed in by the wires of their possessions, wires shot across to submission by fierce, burnished androids who didn't shoot me, who handed me a highlighter and a card like a Commuter Rail ticket and told me to count their shells, to tally their averages. The Androids, silver like they bathed in eye-shadow, are impressed with my speed. I'm quick “for a human” they said. “I'm Ashkenazi” I said like that explained it, and we—a man, a woman and I-- fled to the surface world un-pursued, to poke around junkyards; everything has been abandoned and it all ended up here and we wander, picking through skis and docks, trucks and mattresses and home telephones until we find the little red car that might have been waiting for us to ride away through towering alleyways white with sunkissed snow.
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5/23/2017 12:32:33 pm
Glad you reposted this for the prompt! I think it could be a movie plot? A science fiction fantasy? And all the machines...sometimes I do think the human-ness in us is being subsumed by the technology we surround ourselves with. This said as I am typing this on my computer! :)
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Rachel Rosenberg
5/23/2017 12:48:38 pm
Thanks! I feel like it could be a movie too...lol, anyone want to write a script?
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Bjorn Rudberg
5/23/2017 12:38:14 pm
I love the details of this dream... I probably dream a lot but I can never remember any details... somehow this made me think of
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Rachel Rosenberg
5/23/2017 12:49:55 pm
Yes, that makes sense. It's probably the androids, lol. It feels very Dante to me, too; people being sealed in by their own possessions is very "level of hell"ish.
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5/23/2017 12:52:25 pm
Wow, a futuristic nightmare. Scary lines:
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5/23/2017 12:53:49 pm
Dreams offer bizarre connections.
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paul scribbles
5/23/2017 01:37:09 pm
Perfect for the prompt Rachel. Such a vivid description of your dream and some interesting language to boot. Well penned.
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5/23/2017 01:37:24 pm
Wow, you have very cool dreams. Mine mostly involve cleaning houses. LOL. Loved this.
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Rachel Rosenberg
5/23/2017 03:13:13 pm
Awww, lol. House cleaning dreams? Well, I'm glad you enjoyed this little piece of something different.
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5/23/2017 01:55:05 pm
Although I don't think we have to worry about the androids any more than the zombies, they could make an enjoyable dream or movie.
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Rachel Rosenberg
5/23/2017 03:16:20 pm
Thanks Bev! Your dream actually sounds interesting too; very creative and full of symbolism.
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Sascha Darlington
5/23/2017 04:03:06 pm
Beautiful images.
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5/24/2017 02:02:36 am
This is so visual. I love the androids bathed in eye shadow, and that dream logic that isn't logic at all.
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